So, what I've come to gather from most of my peer feedback--I need to establish my argument. I think that my audience has finally been found, but I need to somehow engage my arguement with my audience to a greater extent. I originally wanted to write about the use of digital media technologies and how it effects the k-12 classroom. Then I realized that this is too vague, and I needed to tighten up the audience. So instead of making a k-12, parent, teacher, student audience, I focused on mainly teachers and students. This still proved to be difficult and found that just aiming for the prospective of teachers and digital media technology was the best route. My issue then is having all of this left over information from my previous paper, and trying to zone it in on the teacher perspective. Therefore, I need to find the proper source to thread it all together.
1)Not quite yet, I have established my audience, but need to relate the arguemnt with my audience to a greater extent. Regardless, I believe that I still have a strong thesis.
2)So far yes, however, I'm still talking about how digital media effects students, when it should be more about teachers. I need to somehow make this a contrast in how teachers can learn from the technical abilites students have over teachers.
3) I would say so, I'm trying to write this paper as someone that isn't that tech savy, so it allows the reader to sympathize and understand that many are going through the same process.
4)Not quite yet, I need a few more paragraphs and something to connect my ideas together.
5)Not quite yet, I need some work in this area.
6) I would hope so, I'm trying to write clear an concise.
7)I engage my audience, and try to relate my arguement to my audience. Unfortunately, I still need to fit these two together.
8)Not quite yet.
9)I think they do.
10) I don't have one yet.
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