Week 11: Reflective Writing About My Draft

What would you describe as your purpose in your current draft?
As of now, the purpose is to persuade teachers to find a way to accept technology into their classroom, and attain technological literacy.

For whom are you writing?
Teachers that aren't technological literate.

How have you shaped your writing to address that audience, given your purpose?
I'm giving examples of working classrooms that have technology, and also places where teachers can learn how to use technology in the classroom. I've also tried to rewrite my introduction so I could implement a little more rhetorical writing.

Describe the main points of your argument. Why are the main points arranged as they are in your current draft? Given your audience and purpose, what other arrangements might work?

As of now, this is how my working draft is arranged. 

• Teachers should become technologically literate like their students.
• Teachers should look at the models of other schools that implement technology in their classrooms.
• Teachers should seek out programs that teach technological literacy.

I could possibly start with why teachers should be technologically literate, then talk about the programs that talk about literacy programs, then lastly, talk about the school models that work.

Is your audience likely to find your sources persuasive? Why—or why not? Do you have enough sources? Are they from an appropriate time frame? Are they from sources appropriate to your argument and purpose?

I believe they will, I tried very hard to find sources that aren't before 2005. Technology from even then seems to be much more advanced, and much more integrated into the school curriculum. I could certainly use more sources toward the argument of literacy programs.

Describe the style of your writing. How is this style appropriate for your audience? How might you modify the style to be even more appropriate?

I've already modified my introduction to make it sound more academic, so eventually, once my body is more concrete, I plan on trying to rewrite some of my sentences.

What do you think your audience will walk away from your paper thinking? What might they feel when they finsih reading? What do you hope they will do?

That technology isn't scary, and actually a beneficial tool. It's like teaching people to be responsible with fire, if used properly, it can be very helpful.

What are your main choices in shaping your writing—the main strategies you have chosen—that will help readers finish reading so that they think, feel, and/or do what you just described?

I'm trying to be understanding that as we get older, the more overwhelming, but beneficial technology can be. So a sympathetic approach, with a voice will allow readers to relate.

Based on all the above, what modifications do you think you will make in order to make your writing stronger still?

Finishing my paper, then reworking my sentences to have more rhetorical power.